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Life Aboard the Thunderclap

YoshiRaphElan's Avatar

12.11.2012 , 06:35 PM | #41
This is the final entry of this story - however, coming soon is a story including all classes!

Chapter 29:
Blood of His Men

Gripping his ankle, Jorgan looked outside the ship. The bombs had gone off when Vik and Jorgan had been just outside the caves, and some ice had flown and shredded the skin on Jorgan’s left ankle, as well as pierced the bone.

They were on Hoth now, because Garza had found the Deadeyes. And Imperial prison camp on this world seemed very unlikely–but that was what Zane was after, wasn’t it?

“Let’s go,” Prudii said. “Just you and me.”

“Right,” Jorgan said.

* * *

Jorgan felt his blood boil as Zane entered the cave. How had he–

It all made sense now. Jorgan snarled and was sure he said something to Zane, but he couldn’t hear what he was saying–the words were coming out of his mouth without his consent.

“I’m here to find that Imperial prison!” Zane said. “Now you’ve ruined it! I can’t just stay or they will wonder why two Special Forces troops broke in and didn’t rescue me!”

“Forget you,” Prudii said.

Jorgan said something to Zane again, and then he turned to the Deadeyes. He could hear himself again.

“Come on, let’s get the others and go.”

“Sir…” one said. “The others didn’t make it. They…froze to death.”

Jorgan drew his blaster on Zane and started yelling accusations. He told Zane it was his fault and he was going to shoot him. Prudii was yelling at Jorgan to stand down and Zane was telling him what an idiot he was–

“Jorgan,” Prudii said. “You’ll be court marshaled.”

Jorgan sighed. “Yeah. Right. But I’m putting you on trial when we get back to Coruscant, Zane. So help me…you’re going to regret this.”

Jorgan regretted it himself. All of it…

But he would continue to fight the Empire. For the Deadeyes.


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12.11.2012 , 08:33 PM | #42
Congrats on finishing! (I'm holding out hope that we'll find out more about the secret prison later on in the game )
aren't you a little short for a stormtrooper?
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YoshiRaphElan's Avatar

12.12.2012 , 03:28 PM | #43
Quote: Originally Posted by iamthehoyden View Post
Congrats on finishing! (I'm holding out hope that we'll find out more about the secret prison later on in the game )

Like I said, more to come.

Randomane's Avatar

03.09.2013 , 11:36 PM | #44
Quote: Originally Posted by yoshiraphelan View Post
thanks! :d

like i said, more to come.
maaaan, i can't wait for more!!!!
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03.10.2013 , 12:31 PM | #45
Quote: Originally Posted by Randomane View Post
maaaan, i can't wait for more!!!!
More is here!

Legacy of Destruction

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08.25.2015 , 12:51 PM | #46
That was an impressive piece of writing full of emotion and laughter.

I could visualize what was going on at each point and both felt sadness and joy when the story had such emotions present, especially when you have to make the decision on whether to save Jaxo or save the soldiers because it really is a tough decision to make.

I commend you for your writing ability and loved how you intersected the Flashpoints and the companion interactions and past meetings like Jorgan and Iresso.

I look forward to reading about Makeb, Rishi and Yavin 4, mainly due the fact I'm at the point with my current Trooper which is another reason I enjoyed this story as its all still fresh in my head from my playthrough.

I must add though that when I was reading the first part of the attack on the Gauntlet when you have Yuun as your companion, it reminded me alot of my first playthrough on my first Trooper Vanguard as I found a nice balance between Yuun's melee abilities and my own Shield Specialist abilities.

Unfortunately I couldn't recreate the same balance between my Jedi and Sergeant Rusk, but I guess that was down the roles being reversed and Sgt Rusk not being a Tank.

All in all I enjoyed your story immensely so well done.