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Danthis O'dar - Ord Mantell | 05.17.2009 , 12:48 PM
In this “branching adventure”, you will take the part of Danthis O’dar, a struggling, down-on-his-luck swoop mechanic in the settlement of Bant Station on the planet of Ord Mantell.

Each post in the series will be called a module. The modules will be numbered sequentially. The first module (this one) will be background information with no choice at the end; however, at the end of following modules you will be given a choice. Based on that choice you will be directed to read an entry in the next module. Read only the indicated entry, not the entire module. The choices you make will determine the course of your story.


What you will need:

> A pencil or pen and paper to keep track of Danthis’ successes and failures as you progress through the story

> A 10 sided die

I'll probably update the story twice a week but not sure about that, could be more or less.

Here we go...

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For several years you have been fixing and modifying swoop bikes for the local swoop racers on Ord Mantell. You have always been very talented mechanically. Your father was the first to notice your natural ability with machines when you were a boy. Your earliest memories involve wandering the warehouse where he worked, helping him repair and maintain droids for the local authorities on Ord Mantell.

You never knew your mother and your father never once spoke of her.

When you were twelve years old your father died in a droid repair accident. You never understood the whole story, but the accident report stated a welder droid, being used for salvage at the time, turned on the repair crew your father supervised, killing your father and three other workers. Although an investigation was promised, there would be no investigation.

A local swoop bike racer and friend of your father’s named Lan Daristol took you on as a junior member of his race team. He fed you, let you live in his quarters on the lower side of Bant Station, and taught you how to ride. You learned techniques in speeder and swoop repair from the senior members of Lan's crew and grew rapidly into the best mechanic on Ord Mantell.

At the age of 16 you opened your own shop. Such a young swoop mechanic going out on his own shocked many people, but you didn’t care. The novelty generated extra customers and more work. As business ramped up and the shop became known, you hired on talented people, most of them friends from the swoop races.

Those were the good years. Business was plentiful. The racers came to your shop for custom modifications to their bikes. They paid quite well for your personal attention and you were happy to see to their requests. Some of the racers wanted additional gravitational dampeners to improve handling or extra layers of duronium plating on the chassis to protect their bikes from the constant nicks and collisions endured on the circuit. The more adventurous pilots wanted outlandish propulsion systems. No problem. If you could get a hold of the right parts – and you always did - you were the one to go to and everyone knew it. Among the swoop racer community you became known as “Fixxer.”

Using the profits accumulated from the bike shop, you acquired a personal repair droid named X7-3. You outfitted X7-3 with the latest array of repair tools and modification equipment packages. You also bought a large, very comfortable personal landspeeder. You altered the speeder by adjusting the strength of the accelerator beyond the legal limits prescribed by the Ord Mantell Vehicle Authority - not that anyone listened to those guys.

At night after work you would drink too much Corellian ale and spend lavish amounts of credits on off-world dancers. The nightlife of Ord Mantell enticed you with a thousand varied pleasures from the far corners of the Outer Rim. Times were good. But that was then and this is…

Now. Now you could kick yourself.

Every night you fall asleep wondering why you didn’t save up credits when you had the chance.

About two years ago business started to dry up. After a high ranking Republic official was charged with paying a Rodian racer named Leedro Gans to murder another racer in order to ensure a winning bet, the swoop scene had no choice but to accept some heavy handed regulations from the O.M.V.A.. The swoop circuit had to clean up its act or it would be forced to shut down. The offending official was charged and convicted with the crime and sent to a Republic detention facility. Leedro Gans left the circuit and quietly disappeared into the Outer Rim.

After the incident, interest in the races declined. It wasn’t that people stopped going to the races or stopped cheering for their favorite racers, but the swoop inspired mania that fueled your business took a serious hit. As the business slowed you were forced to remove friends you had known since childhood from the pay roster of the shop and even though you made an excellent profit off the racers, you still had to borrow heavily to acquire the latest upgrades from the top Mag-Lev companies. Now you owe them all: Mantell Motors, the Corellian Swoop Consortium, Duro Suspension Drive Yards, among others.

In retrospect you realize your business grew too quickly. The shop’s supernova like expansion brought in a lot of fast credits, but when the race scene calmed down, it left you over-extended.

About six months ago a concerned group of your creditors came to Ord Mantell to have a look at your current business profile. They weren’t pleased. The unpleasant evening ended with you handing out vague assurances that business would get better, that you would pay down your loans shortly, that ...Yea. It sounded good, but it was obvious they weren’t in the mood to buy what you were selling.


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Continue to Module 2
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Danthis O'dar - Ord Mantell: Module 2 | 05.17.2009 , 09:46 PM


Module 2


While tearing apart two used and badly damaged swoops one afternoon, you get a call on the holo-transceiver. You pull yourself out from under one of the bikes, wipe your hands on a nearby rag, and answer the call. The tiny blue image of a fat, hairy Toydarian materializes in front of you.

“What do you want Garn? I told you I would have the swoops torn down by tomorrow.”

Garn flutters in and out of view, his stunted wings beating furiously, “Uhhh…I need to see you about the job.”

“Garn you know I don’t like changing a deal after starting work. If you want to renegotiate, fine. But over the Holo, ok, I’m busy.”

“No, no. That’s not it. I…” Garn scratches his brown, bulbous snout, “need to see you in perssonn. Come to the parts yard okayy? I’ll pay you for the time huh.”

Something isn’t right here. Garn is definitely afraid of something, or someone.

“Ok..” You say hesitantly, “I’ll be over.” You press a small metallic gray button on the holo-transceiver. The grainy blue image of the nervous Toydarian fades away.

X7-3 walks up behind you and lets out a low whistle.

"Yea I know. That was odd."

Although anybody could see Garn was not in his right skin; you are sure there is something more to it. He wasn’t just nervous. He was terrified. He tried to hide it from you but failed.

As far back as you can remember you have had a certain “feeling” when dealing with others. A hunch some would call it but it’s more than a hunch. At times it becomes overwhelming. Around strong emotions you often become disoriented. At other times you just seem to know when people are lying.

Unfortunately, you don't always have the 'hunch'. Most of the time it appears unexpectedly, but your intuition has proven to be very profitable in the past.

If you didn’t need his business so badly you would tell Garn to beat his stubby wings into the upper atmosphere and get blown away, but instead you walk into a dark alcove just off the main repair bay, open a locker and take out a Republic blaster pistol. As you stow the tiny blaster securely between your mechanic’s belt and your left hip (thinking you should probably get the gun licensed one of these days), you wonder what could have frightened Garn.

- You have a decision to make -

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Do you close down shop and take X7-3 with you?
(read module 3A)

Do you leave X7-3 in charge of the shop* and go alone?
(read module 3B)
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*X7-3 is quite capable of doing routine tasks around the shop, but he doesn't handle customers very well.
 
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05.18.2009 , 11:11 AM



Module 3
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Entry 3A
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You hastily put away the repair tools you were using to tear apart the swoops and set the shop's generators to power down after you leave.

“X7, initiate hover mode and get in the speeder. We're leaving.” The droid's torso emits a humming throb as he activates his custom repulsor unit. The droid begins to float above the repair bay floor. X7 retracts his legs into his barrel shaped torso-manifold, coming to rest in the passenger seat of your landspeeder.

You jump into the driver’s seat and maneuver the speeder out of the shop.


[ Read Module 4A ]


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Entry 3B
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“X7, you’re in charge of the shop while I’m gone. If I’m not back in two hours call Lan and tell him I went to Garn’s junkyard, and that I haven’t returned. In two hours. Got it?”

The burnished bronze droid emits a series of high-pitched beeps, whistles and whorls, his ocular servo-attenuators expanding and contracting frantically.

“Don’t worry. I’ll be fine. Monitor the holo-transceiver. If Lan calls while I’m gone patch him into the speeder.” You whisk your vest off a nearby workbench, “And clean up the repair bay. It’s a mess.”

You jump into your landspeeder and maneuver the vehicle out of the shop.


[ Read Module 4B ]


 
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Update May 20th | 05.20.2009 , 10:40 AM
I will be updating the story with module 4 later tonight.
 
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Danthis
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05.20.2009 , 09:16 PM
Module 4

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Entry 4A
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You move the landspeeder down the long, winding ridge that leads to the center of Bant Station. You begin to cough. In the distance Mount Bant is pouring fiery magma into the sea and belching ash and hot gases into the atmosphere. The low lying volcanic dome erupts at least three times a year. The volcano turns the sky ruddy orange and deposits fine ash that hangs around town for a few days until the island breeze clears it out to sea. You reach into your vest, pull out a black pilot’s scarf and wrap it around your face.

Once you reach town center you turn off the main thoroughfare onto Starport Row. To your left, you see the arched entrance to The Nine Rings cantina. The Nine Rings has always done brisk business catering to recent arrivals to Ord Mantell. Today is no different: species from hundreds of worlds mingle at the local watering hole.

As you begin to merge onto the busier lanes, three blue lights on the dash blink in sequence, BEEP - BEEP – BEEP. The speeder’s communications panel indicates you have an incoming holographic transmission.

"X7 would you activate the transceiver so I can take this call. It's probably Lan."

"Whoo eeet eeet ooh doo eet.... ..... ..... beedeep ohwee ohweeet bee beeep "

[Translation: Certainly Master. I would like to remind Master that according to the newly revised Ord Mantell Personal Repulsorlift Enabled Vehicle Operations Code, it is a third degree violation to receive personal transmissions of a non-emergency nature while operating a Class-3 landspeeder. Please my Master, take care to follow all provided lane guidance suggestions while you complete this human interaction.]

"Yes. I will be sure to do that X7. Thank you for the lengthy reminder."

"Doo weet beet deeee deep."

[Translation: My pleasure]

X7-3 opens a compartment inside the driver's arm rest revealing a miniature holographic transceiver.

The familiar face of Lan Daristol appears before you. A pair of silver weather worn racing goggles covers his eyes, but you can still make out the square jaw, dirt-blonde hair and nose broken in a racing accident years ago.

“Lan.”

“Danth. Nice weather we’re having.”

“I hate it when old man Bant wakes up.”

“Same here. Where are you?”

“Heading to Garn’s.”

“…I wouldn’t.”

You pause, “Why not?”

“I sent Devek to Garn’s place about an hour ago to pick up a few parts. He said he overheard a well-armed Rodian and the biggest Trandoshan he had ever seen asking questions about you.”

You slow the speeder and pull into the repair lane. “What kind of questions?”

“Dev didn’t catch all the conversation…he said they were looking for you.”

Noting the concern on your face, Lan asks, “Why don’t we meet for a drink… on me? I need to talk to you.”

“Where?” You ask, your voice tense.

“I think we need to lay low.” Lan pauses, “Let’s meet at L’lora’s.”

L’lora is an elder Twilek female who opened up a popular pazaak den a few years ago. She prefers local customers only; people she can get to know, regular customers like you and Lan. Since off-worlders are not welcome to play, eat or drink at her establishment, it seems a safe place for a private meeting and L’lora would know if any other dangerous scum had been asking about you.

You must decide:


[ Do you continue on to Garn’s shop without meeting Lan? Read module 5A]

[ Do you meet Lan at L’lora’s? Read module 5C ]


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Entry 4B
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You move the speeder down the long, winding ridge that leads to the center of Bant Station. You begin to cough. In the distance Mount Bant is pouring fiery magma into the sea and belching ash and hot gases into the atmosphere. The low lying volcanic dome erupts at least three times a year. The volcano turns the sky ruddy orange and deposits fine ash that hangs around town for a few days until the island breeze clears it out to sea. You reach into your vest, pull out a black pilot’s scarf and wrap it around your face.

Once you reach the center of town you turn off the main thoroughfare and onto Starport Row. To your left you see the arched entry to The Nine Rings cantina. The Nine Rings has always done brisk business catering to recent arrivals to Ord Mantell. Today is no different: species from hundreds of worlds mingle at the local watering hole.

As you begin to merge onto the busier lanes, three blue lights on the dash blink in sequence, BEEP - BEEP – BEEP. The speeder’s communications panel indicates you have an incoming holographic transmission.

You adjust the controls on the dash and flick a switch near your right hand. A compartment on the driver’s armrest opens revealing a miniature holographic transceiver. You turn the unit on to receive the message, splitting your attention between the road and the transmission.

The red glowing ocular sensors of X7-3 greet you, the familiar layout of the shop’s reception area behind him.

“Bleep bleep bloorrr beep wheeep eep eet dwee dwee doo wee dooweeeet.”

[Translation: My Master. Incoming message from Lan Daristol. I will route the transmission to your landspeeder as requested.]

The familiar face of Lan Daristol appears before you. A pair of silver, weather worn racing goggles covers his eyes, but you can still make out the square jaw, dirt-blonde hair and nose broken in a racing accident years ago.

“Lan.”

“Danth. Nice weather we’re having.”

“I hate it when old man Bant wakes up.”

“Same here. Where are you?”

“Heading to Garn’s.”

“…I wouldn’t.”

You pause, “Why not?”

“I sent Devek to Garn’s place about an hour ago to pick up a few parts. He said he overheard a well armed Rodian and the biggest Trandoshan he had ever seen asking questions about you.”

You slow the speeder and pull into the repair lane, “What kind of questions?”

“Dev didn’t catch all the conversation…but he said they were looking for you.”

Noting the concern on your face, Lan asks, “Why don’t we meet for a drink… on me? I need to talk to you.”

“Where?” You ask, your voice tense.

“I think we need to lay low.” Lan pauses, “Let’s meet at L’lora’s.”

L’lora is an elder Twilek female who opened up a popular pazaak den a few years ago. She prefers local customers only; people she can get to know, regular customers like you and Lan. Since off-worlders are not welcome to play, eat or drink at her establishment, it seems a safe place for a private meeting and L’lora would know if any other dangerous scum had been asking about you.

You must decide -


[Do you continue to Garn’s without meeting Lan? Read module 5B]

[Do you meet Lan at L’lora’s? Read module 5D]


 
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05.22.2009 , 12:55 PM
very good thus far, please keep updating
"If the world does come to an end, lets remember what the real problem was - that we learned how to precipitate mass death before we got past the neurological disorder of wishing for it." - Bill Maher, commenting on the common religious idea of an apocalypse.
DO NOT RELEASE A DEMO TO THE PRESS BUT NOT THE PUBLIC.
 
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05.22.2009 , 03:18 PM
there wasn't a "3B Module", other than that it got very interesting
 
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05.22.2009 , 03:55 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by flamebeast
very good thus far, please keep updating
Thanks, I plan on it.
Learn all about me: Danthis O'dar - Swoop Mechanic.
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Learn all about me: Interactive Version
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05.22.2009 , 03:57 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Danthis
Thanks, I plan on it.
oh, one minor complaint - can you make the writing white? it stands out much better on the dark blue background than black does, and highlighting stuff in order to read it results in colours that can't be good for peoples' eyes.
"If the world does come to an end, lets remember what the real problem was - that we learned how to precipitate mass death before we got past the neurological disorder of wishing for it." - Bill Maher, commenting on the common religious idea of an apocalypse.
DO NOT RELEASE A DEMO TO THE PRESS BUT NOT THE PUBLIC.
 
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Danthis
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05.22.2009 , 03:59 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Darth_Tanneris
there wasn't a "3B Module", other than that it got very interesting
Actually there is a Module 3 Entry B. It starts with "X7 you're in charge of the shop..."
Learn all about me: Danthis O'dar - Swoop Mechanic.
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