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irishfino
12.26.2012 , 06:09 PM | #321
STAB HIM AGAIN.
What the hell?
[chuckles]
I'll probably die if you group with me, but I'll go out with both lightsabers drawn stabbing someone in the face. Probably you, but it's cool. Forever Shenanigans!!

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Vesaniae
12.27.2012 , 09:35 AM | #322
It's deleted scene time again! This one was cut entirely from the story, but it would have taken place shortly after Chapter Six. I also wrote it before I came up with much of the main plot, so it serves mainly to provide exposition. I think I might have been thinking about posting it in the Short Fic Weekly Challenge as a means of introducing A'tro...I can't remember.

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bright_ephemera
12.27.2012 , 09:47 AM | #323
I love this! And that mix of affection, sniping, rivalry, pride, and occasional outright murder is a fantastic family dynamic.
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irishfino
12.27.2012 , 11:14 AM | #324
Aww, father/daughter bonding over sweet, delicious murder.
That's - that's something I would say...
I know.
Help... me...
I'll probably die if you group with me, but I'll go out with both lightsabers drawn stabbing someone in the face. Probably you, but it's cool. Forever Shenanigans!!

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Vesaniae
12.28.2012 , 10:21 AM | #325
Have ALL the bonus material! Today I am featuring the first draft of Chapter Fifteen (link is to the final version).

Somewhat bizarrely, this was one of the first scenes I wrote for this story, despite its placement rather far into the plot. Then again, this turned out to be a good thing, because it gave me time to edit it repeatedly. In fact, I eventually decided that this first incarnation was simply not good enough, and rewrote the second part entirely.

And now, have some iffy characterization:


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Force Lightning: The solution to every problem. Every. Problem.
Afterimages * Walking Penumbral * Like Moths to the Flame
Forever Shenanigans!

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MilaniGrey
12.29.2012 , 04:35 PM | #326
Ftb! Ftb!
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Vesaniae
12.30.2012 , 07:47 PM | #327
I said I'd post this on the 28th, and I didn't. Shame on me for procrastinating. Anyway, here's the second draft of Chapter Fifteen. This bears a fairly close similarity to what was eventually posted, although I eventually rejected it for being, like the first draft, quite OOC. I used a few lines from this in Chapter Twenty-Two. I do tend to recycle my dialogue. It's so efficient, Quinn would approve!

And now, our feature presentation:


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Force Lightning: The solution to every problem. Every. Problem.
Afterimages * Walking Penumbral * Like Moths to the Flame
Forever Shenanigans!

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irishfino
12.30.2012 , 07:56 PM | #328
Om nom nom.
I'll probably die if you group with me, but I'll go out with both lightsabers drawn stabbing someone in the face. Probably you, but it's cool. Forever Shenanigans!!

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iamthehoyden
12.31.2012 , 06:36 PM | #329
Ves, the piece with A'tro and her father was pretty awesome. So messed up, but perfect for a Sith family.
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Vesaniae
01.01.2013 , 11:39 AM | #330
Now, let's take a look at the first version of Chapter Seventeen. It changed considerably between that first draft and what was eventually posted. I also borrowed quite a few things from this chapter for Chapter Twenty-Two...I'm starting to think that Twenty-Two doesn't have much content that isn't recycled from something else.

Unfortunately, I never finished this early draft of Chapter Seventeen--it stops right when things start to get interesting, too. Shame on me.


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Force Lightning: The solution to every problem. Every. Problem.
Afterimages * Walking Penumbral * Like Moths to the Flame
Forever Shenanigans!