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Darth_Solrac
04.08.2012 , 06:50 PM | #101
Species/Race: Human.
Name: Draykos.
Middle Name: Ecosi.
Last Name: Solrac.
Nickname: Dray.
Gender: Male.
Date of Birth: 24 years before whatever year SWTOR started in.
Place of Birth: Capital City, Naboo.
Age: 24.
Height: 5'9.
Weight: 165 lbs.
Hair Color/Style: Light brown.
Facial Appearance: Normal, tan.
Eye Color: Brown.
Body Appearance: Average.
Home Planet: Naboo.
Current Residence: Jedi Temple, Courascant.
Allegiance: 1. Galactic Republic. 2. Family. 3. Himself. 4. Light side. 5. Jedi Order.
Profession: Jedi Knight/Guardian.
Lightsaber combat style: Soresu.
Armor/Clothes: Jedi Knight's robes.
Primary Weapon(s): Revanite's Lightsaber.
Secondary Weapon(s): Force projection abilities.
Miscellaneous Item(s): n/a.

Biography:

Carrying on the new generation of Solrac force users, Draykos Solrac is Markos Solrac's younger brother by 4 years. Taken to train in the Jedi Order at the same age as his elder brother, Draykos seems to be carving out a different path with a still unknown destiny. He followed the progression from Padawan to Knight at the same rate, & years as Markos almost. 5-23 Padawan, Jedi Knight at 23. A loyal & dutiful Republican, he openly & very vocally calls for increased funding, & a Senate vote on conscription to boost the Republic Military's strength against what he sees as the better financed, numbered, & disciplined Imperial military. He has also started calling for an increased Jedi Order role & influence in the Republic leadership. Perhaps even harkening back to the days when Jedi themselves held the Supreme Chancellorship. He is a secret, deep admirer of Revan, before his fall. He views these as the loyal, rational, & necessary actions needed to save the Republic from its "internal corruption decay & ultimate Imperial annexation if our course isn't much changed, & fast." His Jedi Masters view them as the actions & ideology of a greying Jedi on the verge of a dark fall.

Draykos passed the Jedi Trials, notably with flying colors, better than his brother. This is likely because they emphasize lightsaber combat & skill. Draykos favors this over developing his force abilities currently as opposed to Markos, who showed more interest in the force. Adding to his master's angst of him, Draykos is also known to like to drink, & womanize. A perfect storm for a clash with the Jedi Council seems inevitable.....
Nobody expects the Sith Inquisition!
Guild: Imperial Army.
Darth (Markos) Solrac: LV 50, Dark Sith Sorcerer.
Draykos Solrac: LV 29, Dark grey Jedi Guardian.

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Trunkan
04.12.2012 , 07:31 PM | #102
Hey all, do you guys still give feedback? Would be great if someone could advice me on this character, there's a lot of developing to do - English is not my native tongue and this is my second character so I have got a lot to learn.

Would be most appreciated!


Species/Race: Twi'lek
Name: Zaamat
Last Name: Aatov
Nickname: "Swipe"
Gender: Male
Place of Birth: Sleheyron
Age: 74
Height: 160 centimetres/5' 2''
Weight: 170 kilos/375 lbs
Hair Color/Style: Long lekkus decorated with black tribal tattoos, resembling leaves, berries and other wild plants
Facial Appearance: His double chins and his general obesity, in combination with his energic eyes and happy smile, would make even the darkest of Sith lords smile upon peeking at his face - old, wrinkled
Eye Color: Blue
Body Appearance: Blue skinned, overweight, big and long lekkus. His back is slightly bent due to his age and hours upon hours spent in the Jedi temple's refectories and gardens
Home Planet: Ryloth
Current Residence: With the return of the Empire and the horrible battle which took place at the Republic's capital world, he got forced into retirement and currently lives off selling his home-grown lipana berries to the higher echelons of the society (Usually influential senators and rich CEOs)
Allegiance: He is a staunch supporter of the Republic and its senators, generals and Jedi
Profession: Jedi dietist and artisan. Before the Sacking of Coruscant, his job as a dietist took him and his Sullustan companion Teep "Swoop" Nytt on travels all around the galaxy in search for exotic, rare products, which they cooked into highly nutricious food and drinks for the Jedi training at the temple or out in the field. This work sharpened their diplomatic minds, having to negotiate and sign contracts with isolated groups on distant planets in order to get to harvest and produce their territorial products. Hence, with decades of experience, Zaamat's diplomatic skills are almost in line with the top-notch diplomats of the order. His botanical skills are second only to the Ithorian masters, and even they are impressed by his innovative mind and creative solutions.
Armor/Clothes: Wears brown Jedi robes, keen on always wearing a skirt and a white apron embrodied with images of wroshyr trees while working [in the kitchen or the garden]
Primary Weapon(s): Lightsabre, green colour - although not much of a fighter, Zaamat is knows his deal in the Soresu lightsabre form
Miscellaneous Item(s): A holocron made by Teek Nytt - with detailed recipes and formulas of Jedi diet


Zaamat Aatov - a heavy tattooed light blue Twi'lek Jedi dietist and artisan who once chose to liberate an enslaved human boy during a culinary study tour all around the planet of Nar Shaddaa and take him under his wing as his Jedi padawan. The boy had been brought as an infant to Wobla the Hutt by Devaronian slavers from an unknown planet four years ago. He was quickly taught the rules - to live with a slave collar around his neck twenty-four hours a day. Obey or suffer.

As a drudge, the boy was constantly pressured by heavy labour to manage the hologardens onboard Wobla's luxury yacht, which at the time was the single, most expensive and exclusive cruiser to be found in the whole system. (Until Wobla's later-to-be rival Yunta the Hutt, had everyone onboard the legendary yacht massacred in a bloody plot to kill Wobla's reputation as being the best party host in The Hutt Cartel - unofficially funded by the Exchange)

With three decks of pure luxurity - five separate cantinas, an invaluable slave quarter with dozen of professional Twi'lek slaves offering everything from massage and escort to target practice for each and every one of Wobla's valued guests and of course the grandeur hologarden on the bottom floor, featuring nothing less than exotic gree technology - the yacht was truely a marvel to behold, a priced possession of the grand businesshutt.

Zaamat was as previously mentioned, on a culiary cruise through the system when he first encountered his future apprentice, Bal Shosa. Invited by the Hutt himself to be amongst the first guests to test new formula for Raxan-worm fluid wine, Zaamat's attention was instantly drawn to the hologarden on the lower levels of the yacht as the Hutt's wingmen guided them around the ship. He asked the other in his crew to continue the tour as he stood still, admiring the technological masterpiece. Astonished by the landscape of the hologarden, with its authentic aromas, soothing breeze and beautiful scenery; the first thoughts which ran through his mind were "How do they tend it, all this exo-tech. Are there Gree present here?", Then he noticed the white haired child tinkering with the ventilation shafts near one of the holoprojectors. "No, of course not" he added as he steered his steps towards the boy.

As he approached the him, Zaamat noticed the slave collar around his neck and empathy slowly reached his mind. The boy turned around and gave the Twi'lek's a curious look, Then quickly looked down in the floor. Perhaps intimidated by his big stature, perhaps not.

He was in any case quick with introducing himself "Bal Shosa at your service, sir" his voice sounded and bowed politely, with his look to the floor. As with most slaves, Zaamat put on a happy face, smiled and reached out his hand in a gesture for him to look up and meet his eyes. Perhaps uncertain, the boy slowly, with care looked up to the big, blue Twi'lek which stood before him.

They got observe each other for a few seconds before the shock collar kicked in an electric shock and shook the boy to the ground.

The rules are clear: Obey your master, do not question your master and DO NOT speak without being spoken to first.

Horrified by the scene and his mind clouded by emotion, Zaamat drew his lightsabre and with the precision of a Jedi cut loose the slave collar, which fell off the boy's neck with a thud, making malfunctioning sounds. "Bzz bzzzzz beep!" then died off.

The boy, who had not yet realized what just happened, stared at Zaamat - with his lighsabre drawn and strained look on his face as the Weequay security guards came running through the holoforest as the slave-revolt alarm sounded. They doubted a moment when saw the Jedi's posture and his weapon before drawing their rifles, aiming them at both the Jedi and the boy.

"Pardon us, master Jedi. You got with the slaves?" one of the Weequay guards said "Come with us" and motioned with his rifle at an entrance near the authentic holowaterfall to the right of them. Zaamat inclined his head, reached down to pick up the unconscious boy and carried him with, off to the guards' security office.

"I want to negotiate" Zaamat told the Weequay guards as they sat down in the yacht's security office. "If my assumptions are correct, master Wobla is very interested in what I have to offer him" he continued and reached for his pockets. "This" he said and revealed a small brown pouch "Is yagaran aleudrupe plant seed. The last time I checked, the Exchange annihilated an entire colony of Duros botanics on Telos just to get one corn of seed from this plant. I have two dozen - and I am sure... that our dear Hutt would certainly be interested in such prestige and stomping their status underfoot by having twenty-four times the resources they have. In return of this boy's freedom". The Weequays looked queried, chatted some inbetween on their native tongue, then spoke "Yes. This is prized by Wobla the Hutt, he spoke much of it... we can deal."

What Zaamat didn't tell them was that the seeds were fake, not some rare seed from another part of the galaxy, no. Just normal grass seeds he intended to grow to feed the Jedi temple's domesticated beasts with.

Zaamat gave the pouch of yagaran aleudrupe plant seed to the Weequays. He lifed the boy up and walked out off the room, off the yacht and to the spaceport where he met his friend Teek, who offered him ride in his cargo ship, used for storing plants and raw materials.

And so they left the planet, the rest is history.


*03:28 Trunkan has finished writing this character biograhpy*

Thanks for reading and hope you like it, as well as have feedback for it.

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LordTaral
04.12.2012 , 08:27 PM | #103
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Species/Race: Sith Pureblood
Name: Taral
Middle Name:
Last Name:
Nickname: Lord Taral
Gender: Male
Date of Birth: 8 BTC
Place of Birth: Drommus Kaas
Age: 23
Height: 6’1” ft
Weight: 162 lbs
Hair Color/Style: n/a
Facial Appearance: As a Sith, Taral have the typical facial structure, but with somewhat longer chin tendrils with a few decorated rings on his two longer tendrils. His eyes are serpentine and yellow naturally, but when calling on the Dark Side, they are rimmed red. The right side of his face is scarred from a attack from a Tuk’ata.
Eye Color: Yellow
Body Appearance: With his height, Taral is lean with noticeable muscles, and have other scars from his slave overlord before becoming Sith Inquisitor.
Home Planet: n/a
Current Residence: Dark Messiah
Allegiance: The Sith Order and the Empire
Profession: Sith Inquisitor
Armor/Clothes: As a rising Sith Inquisitor, Taral wear the uniform purple armored robes of a official Sith Inquisitor but wear a face mask of intimidating appearance of a scolding face to give a more mysterious appall to his appearance.
Primary Weapon(s): Curved-hilted lightsaber
Secondary Weapon(s):
Miscellaneous Item(s): Dark Medallion, Sith Focus of Dark Agression

Biography:
The son of a somewhat long lineage of Sith Pureblood who tried to annihilate their rivals a hundred years after the fall of the Emperor’s agents, Darth Revan and Malak, and were disgraced and enslaved by their greatest rival. Taral, showing a incredible connection with the Force that surpassed many of his ancestors, was chosen by the Sith to become a candidate of rising into a Sith Inquisitor. Seeing this as a clear sign of his destiny, Taral became the most successful and ruthless of his peers, and killed his own personal rival, whom been his pompous overseer’s favorite. With sadistic glee, Taral became the apprentice of a mysterious Sith Lord by the name of Darth Penthus.
A couple years under his new Sith master, Lord Taral has became a skilled Inquisitor with a profound mastery of Sith magic and alchemies. A skilled duelist, particularly in the elegant form of Makashi, Taral isn’t quick to falter, and when that occurs, his refusal to die manifest in the form of barrages of lightning.
How dare you?! Same character name as me! There is treachery afoot!
Well, I guess I can let it slide this once, as mine is a Warrior... :P
Out of curiosity and assuming you see this, what server are you on?

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Bodaciousbaconn
04.17.2012 , 08:56 PM | #104
Quote: Originally Posted by Trunkan View Post
Hey all, do you guys still give feedback? Would be great if someone could advice me on this character, there's a lot of developing to do - English is not my native tongue and this is my second character so I have got a lot to learn.

Would be most appreciated!


Species/Race: Twi'lek
Name: Zaamat
Last Name: Aatov
Nickname: "Swipe"
Gender: Male
Place of Birth: Sleheyron
Age: 74
Height: 160 centimetres/5' 2''
Weight: 170 kilos/375 lbs
Hair Color/Style: Long lekkus decorated with black tribal tattoos, resembling leaves, berries and other wild plants
Facial Appearance: His double chins and his general obesity, in combination with his energic eyes and happy smile, would make even the darkest of Sith lords smile upon peeking at his face - old, wrinkled
Eye Color: Blue
Body Appearance: Blue skinned, overweight, big and long lekkus. His back is slightly bent due to his age and hours upon hours spent in the Jedi temple's refectories and gardens
Home Planet: Ryloth
Current Residence: With the return of the Empire and the horrible battle which took place at the Republic's capital world, he got forced into retirement and currently lives off selling his home-grown lipana berries to the higher echelons of the society (Usually influential senators and rich CEOs)
Allegiance: He is a staunch supporter of the Republic and its senators, generals and Jedi
Profession: Jedi dietist and artisan. Before the Sacking of Coruscant, his job as a dietist took him and his Sullustan companion Teep "Swoop" Nytt on travels all around the galaxy in search for exotic, rare products, which they cooked into highly nutricious food and drinks for the Jedi training at the temple or out in the field. This work sharpened their diplomatic minds, having to negotiate and sign contracts with isolated groups on distant planets in order to get to harvest and produce their territorial products. Hence, with decades of experience, Zaamat's diplomatic skills are almost in line with the top-notch diplomats of the order. His botanical skills are second only to the Ithorian masters, and even they are impressed by his innovative mind and creative solutions.
Armor/Clothes: Wears brown Jedi robes, keen on always wearing a skirt and a white apron embrodied with images of wroshyr trees while working [in the kitchen or the garden]
Primary Weapon(s): Lightsabre, green colour - although not much of a fighter, Zaamat is knows his deal in the Soresu lightsabre form
Miscellaneous Item(s): A holocron made by Teek Nytt - with detailed recipes and formulas of Jedi diet


Zaamat Aatov - a heavy tattooed light blue Twi'lek Jedi dietist and artisan who once chose to liberate an enslaved human boy during a culinary study tour all around the planet of Nar Shaddaa and take him under his wing as his Jedi padawan. The boy had been brought as an infant to Wobla the Hutt by Devaronian slavers from an unknown planet four years ago. He was quickly taught the rules - to live with a slave collar around his neck twenty-four hours a day. Obey or suffer.

As a drudge, the boy was constantly pressured by heavy labour to manage the hologardens onboard Wobla's luxury yacht, which at the time was the single, most expensive and exclusive cruiser to be found in the whole system. (Until Wobla's later-to-be rival Yunta the Hutt, had everyone onboard the legendary yacht massacred in a bloody plot to kill Wobla's reputation as being the best party host in The Hutt Cartel - unofficially funded by the Exchange)

With three decks of pure luxurity - five separate cantinas, an invaluable slave quarter with dozen of professional Twi'lek slaves offering everything from massage and escort to target practice for each and every one of Wobla's valued guests and of course the grandeur hologarden on the bottom floor, featuring nothing less than exotic gree technology - the yacht was truely a marvel to behold, a priced possession of the grand businesshutt.

Zaamat was as previously mentioned, on a culiary cruise through the system when he first encountered his future apprentice, Bal Shosa. Invited by the Hutt himself to be amongst the first guests to test new formula for Raxan-worm fluid wine, Zaamat's attention was instantly drawn to the hologarden on the lower levels of the yacht as the Hutt's wingmen guided them around the ship. He asked the other in his crew to continue the tour as he stood still, admiring the technological masterpiece. Astonished by the landscape of the hologarden, with its authentic aromas, soothing breeze and beautiful scenery; the first thoughts which ran through his mind were "How do they tend it, all this exo-tech. Are there Gree present here?", Then he noticed the white haired child tinkering with the ventilation shafts near one of the holoprojectors. "No, of course not" he added as he steered his steps towards the boy.

As he approached the him, Zaamat noticed the slave collar around his neck and empathy slowly reached his mind. The boy turned around and gave the Twi'lek's a curious look, Then quickly looked down in the floor. Perhaps intimidated by his big stature, perhaps not.

He was in any case quick with introducing himself "Bal Shosa at your service, sir" his voice sounded and bowed politely, with his look to the floor. As with most slaves, Zaamat put on a happy face, smiled and reached out his hand in a gesture for him to look up and meet his eyes. Perhaps uncertain, the boy slowly, with care looked up to the big, blue Twi'lek which stood before him.

They got observe each other for a few seconds before the shock collar kicked in an electric shock and shook the boy to the ground.

The rules are clear: Obey your master, do not question your master and DO NOT speak without being spoken to first.

Horrified by the scene and his mind clouded by emotion, Zaamat drew his lightsabre and with the precision of a Jedi cut loose the slave collar, which fell off the boy's neck with a thud, making malfunctioning sounds. "Bzz bzzzzz beep!" then died off.

The boy, who had not yet realized what just happened, stared at Zaamat - with his lighsabre drawn and strained look on his face as the Weequay security guards came running through the holoforest as the slave-revolt alarm sounded. They doubted a moment when saw the Jedi's posture and his weapon before drawing their rifles, aiming them at both the Jedi and the boy.

"Pardon us, master Jedi. You got with the slaves?" one of the Weequay guards said "Come with us" and motioned with his rifle at an entrance near the authentic holowaterfall to the right of them. Zaamat inclined his head, reached down to pick up the unconscious boy and carried him with, off to the guards' security office.

"I want to negotiate" Zaamat told the Weequay guards as they sat down in the yacht's security office. "If my assumptions are correct, master Wobla is very interested in what I have to offer him" he continued and reached for his pockets. "This" he said and revealed a small brown pouch "Is yagaran aleudrupe plant seed. The last time I checked, the Exchange annihilated an entire colony of Duros botanics on Telos just to get one corn of seed from this plant. I have two dozen - and I am sure... that our dear Hutt would certainly be interested in such prestige and stomping their status underfoot by having twenty-four times the resources they have. In return of this boy's freedom". The Weequays looked queried, chatted some inbetween on their native tongue, then spoke "Yes. This is prized by Wobla the Hutt, he spoke much of it... we can deal."

What Zaamat didn't tell them was that the seeds were fake, not some rare seed from another part of the galaxy, no. Just normal grass seeds he intended to grow to feed the Jedi temple's domesticated beasts with.

Zaamat gave the pouch of yagaran aleudrupe plant seed to the Weequays. He lifed the boy up and walked out off the room, off the yacht and to the spaceport where he met his friend Teek, who offered him ride in his cargo ship, used for storing plants and raw materials.

And so they left the planet, the rest is history.


*03:28 Trunkan has finished writing this character biograhpy*

Thanks for reading and hope you like it, as well as have feedback for it.
Well, seeing as how the RP forums here are basically on life support, I'll do my best to give you some feedback, if you even see this.

First and foremost, most of your general information is good, except one thing. Being 375 lbs. and only 5' 2"? That just seems a tad bit much for me.

Moving along, I must say I absolutely love how you didn't take a combat approach to this character. Having him as a botanist is an interesting choice, and I really enjoy it. Not very often you see a character not focused on combat.

Onto the Hutt's yacht. Having Gree technology could be a stretch, but seeing as how he is a Hutt, and a wealthy one, I think that it would be able to pass.

And, there isn't much else to criticize. Very good bio build, good character.
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Even in life you do dailies.

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DweezillKagemand
04.19.2012 , 05:48 AM | #105
The fat twi'lek gardener is win.
Dweezill
Top Hatin' Player

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Bodaciousbaconn
04.19.2012 , 04:32 PM | #106
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The fat twi'lek gardener is win.
What I said, uber condensed version.
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Even in life you do dailies.

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Hjonro
04.28.2012 , 07:48 AM | #107
Nice Thread, i like the fact how so many people enjoy roleplay like me
This is not my main character, it is the 1 who has the most effective story.

Species/Race: Human
Name: Narr
Middle Name: N/A
Last Name: Ozcarl
Nickname: The Gatekeeper, Oscar (Nickname by Master Fesoj Kestel)
Gender: Male
Date of Birth: (12 years before the mandolorain wars)
Place of Birth: Isis, Onderon
Age: over 300 years old (looks in mid 20's)
Height: 183 cm
Weight: 68 kg
Hair Color/Style: Black hair, flowing over his ears, down to his neck, averagley long fringe
Facial Appearance: Scar across neck and face, Average nose, Thick curved eyebrows, White skin, not very tan, hair coverd ears.
Eye Color: Shining yellow
Body Appearance: Slim (Body Type 2 on game)
Home Planet: Onderon
Current Residence: Tython
Allegiance: Republic
Profession: Jedi Sentinel
Armor/Clothes: Hooded cloak, Malachor V Battle Mesh
Primary Weapon(s): Gold crystaled lightsaber (His brother's lightsaber), Green crystaled lightsaber
Secondary Weapon(s): Force powers
Miscellaneous Item(s): Naga Sadow's relic

Biography:
2 years after the mandolorian wars began, Mandalorians took over Onderon, Narr's parents and other citizens were abducted by the mandalorians. Narr Ozcarl and his brother Rezulo Ozcarl were both rescued by Jedi Master Zhar Lestin and were both trained at the jedi order on Coruscant.

Rezulo was quite a bit older than Narr so Rezulo was alot more skilled and quickly became a Jedi knight. Rezulo was shortly deployed on his 1st mission. To find a lost holocrom on Raxus Prime. But Narr was catching up quickly and had already and forged his lightsaber while Rezulo was on his mission, Narr was so eager to tell Rezulo but unfortunatley he never got to. Master vrook of the jedi council had reported that on the mission, 5 thugs had shot Rezulo to death on Raxus Prime, Narrs dead brother only managed to cut down 1 thug. The only thing that was recoverd was Rezulo's gold colored lightsaber. Narr now weilded his own, and his borther's lightsaber.

A year after Narr was deployed on a mission to Duro, the homeworld of the race "Duros". Narr was too arrest a bounty hunter named Varvyras, who had destroyed half of a local town. Narr sucssesfully defeated the guards of Varvyras's Lair and arrested Varyvras himself. The council were incredibly impressed. and gave him a force medallion as a gift of the mission, Narr wore it across his waist.

Towards the end of the Mandolorian wars after many missions, Narr was assigned on a battle upon the planet Malachor V along with several other jedi, including The Exile. Towards the beggining, of the battle, Narr had struck several sith down, including a Sith Overseer, but was blown into the very core of the planet and was faitily wounded he had also lost the force medallion in the impact. What Narr did not know, was The Exile (actually named Meetra Surik) had joined Darth Revan, who was leading the imperial forces, and had murderd most of the republic forces. The remaning republic forces had retreated, apart from Narr who had been abandoned on the planet and simply left to die. But as he lay there darth revan aproached him, and he said to him "You have been chosen by the core. You have been summoned to protect the Tomb of Naga Sadow, you are The Gatekeeper."

For 300 years, Narr Ozcarl was enslaved on korriban in the tomb of Naga Sadow. He was used as a tool, and the dark energy would make sure that he would never be defeated. (Explanation of being so old) But when revan saw the light after 300 years and returned Narr Ozcarl to the order on Tython, His face was coverd in Scars. but when he returned, he was In perfect health, he felt as he had fell out of the Sky...

When he returned to the council there was a new Grandmaster, Satele Shan who had retitled Narr, as Knight of The Old Republic. But scince the time back at the temple on Tython, Narr still had to achive another title, Jedi Master. A month or so after He had settled at the temple, Narr was deployed on his mission to become a true Jedi. He was departed to Quesh, where he met Master Fesoj Kestel. Narr found Kestel quite annoying as he was called the Nickname "Oscar" which was mocking his last name. Their mission was to recover a relic from a droid: The Rogue Cartel Warbot. after a feirce battle the warbot had lost hall for of its limbs and had taken a stab to the chest. Kestel opened the heart of the warbot, and retrived the relic.

When both jedi returned to te temple they handed over the relic to Grandmaster Satele Shan and in return, she gave Narr The Relic of Naga Sadow. He was given it to unlock his title of master as he had been in the tomb of Naga Sadow for so long. after a week of trying to unlock it, one night, Narr saw Sadow in a vision. He told Narr to use the force. Narr used his battle meditation ability to focus and purple aura began to suck into the relic, it had finally opend. The next day, Narr Ozcarl took the relic To Grandmaster Shan. Shan nodded to him, and congratulated him by calling him Master Ozcarl...

(To be continued)
Lyrana, Cyborg, Medic Operative, Lvl 50 [The Red Eclipse]
Guild: Archives of Nihilus

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Akilus
04.28.2012 , 08:27 AM | #108
Species/Race: Human
Name: Vamar'din (Reowned as Dark Lord of the Sith, Darth Klaatus)
Middle Name: Akilus
Last Name: Kharr
Nickname: The Wraith of the Empire
Gender: Male
Date of Birth: 3,687 BBY
Place of Birth: Dune Sea
Age: 44
Height: 5'11
Weight: 152 pounds
Hair Color/Style: Bald
Facial Appearance: Clean shaven
Eye Color: Green, Yellow/Orange (dark side)
Body Appearance: Average Build
Home Planet: Tatooine
Current Residence: Flight of the Empire (Flagship)
Allegiance: Empire
Profession: Sith Lord
Armor/Clothes: Heavy Sith-Imperial Armor crafted from Rare Ores
Primary Weapon(s): Red Lightsaber
Secondary Weapon(s): The Force
Miscellaneous Item(s): Respirator, Breathing Helmet (Cybernetics)

Biography: Klaatus was born in a little house in the Dune Sea and was given the name Vamar'din. His family was moisture farmers but Klaatus was destined to be more. When his parents found out he was force-sensitive his parents wanted to send him to the Jedi Academy but by Imperial Law every force-sensitive had to go to the Korriban Academy.

Klaatus left for Korriban and trained for years and then killed his Instructor, a Overseer right after his training. Klaatus later married and they had a son 2 years later but Klaatus couldn't make it to see his child's birth because of Imperial Duty. Klaatus requested that his first son be named after his middle name, Akilus and so he was. A year later they had another child named Carrick, at the age of 18 he was already serving the Empire as an Imperial Trooper but he soon abandoned the Empire and became a Mandalorian Bounty Hunter Mercenary-for-hire.

Akilus was found by Jedi Master Valin and was secretly put in the Jedi Academy on Tython for training. Strangely Klaatus' two sons didn't have Imperial Dialect. Soon Klaatus found out what his two sons had become and vowed to bring Akilus to the Dark Side of the Force and bring Carrick to the Imperial Military. But his main objective was to get Akilus to the dark, he hunted him through the galaxy with his flagship eager to bring him to the dark.

Finally Akilus was tooken prisoner onboard Darth Klaatus' ship and was handed over to Klaatus. Another Sith Lord although thought Akilus was too weak and was about to kill Akilus with force lightning but Klaatus jumped in the way and ran up to the Sith Lord grabbed him and made them both jump into the Power Generator killing both Klaatus and the Sith Lord and Akilus remaining to the Light Side.

Most say at that time right before his death Darth Klaatus killed the Sith Lord for his son, and even for the Jedi.

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kaxindin
04.28.2012 , 09:41 AM | #109
Thread is looking really good atm, My favourite is by far the Fat twi'lek gardener. Anywho, I am doing a very Deciving character.

Species/Race: Ratataki
Name: Valorum
Middle Name: Thors
Last Name: Haikel (Later became Kestel due to adpotion)
Nickname: Val, Knightfall
Gender: Male
Age: 44
Place of Birth: Rattatak Capital
Height: 193 cm
Weight: 79 Kilos
Hair Color/Style: Had black hair when Child, Lost hair when 14 years of age
Facial Appearance: Two scars on either side of mouth, 3 tatoo's sweep across his face, small ear stud. Deep voice.
Eye Color: Bronze
Body Appearance: Tall and muscular. (Body size 3 on SWTOR)
Home Planet: Rattatak
Current Residence: Dark Temple, Dromund Kaas, at the very peak of the sculptre. Worshiping Darth Nihilus
Allegiance: Previously Empire, now dedicated as servent of Nihilus.
Profession: Sith Assasin
Armor/Clothes: Nihilus's Mask (Replica) Columi Battlegear.
Primary Weapon(s): Purple crystaled Saberstaff.
Secondary Weapon(s): Force Shield Generator
Miscellaneous Item(s): Nihilus's Lightsaber (Origonal, but never used)

Biography:

Valorum Thors Hailek grew up on the planet Rattatak happily with his Father, Brother, Sister and his mother. He was the youngest of all his family apart from his sister who was like any other younger sister. He spent time hunting with his brother and father, but he spent the most time with his mother. His dad was a veteran in the repblic army and his older brother was training as a republic forces officer. His dream was to become a jedi. He thanked the jedi his life was happy. A year later, 4 days after Valorum turned twelve, his mother died after she had been infected with Rakghoul Plauge. Valorum was so derverstaded. He no longer had belief in the jedi.

Two years later, he had been told by his father that his sister had been learning the ways of the force since Valorum's mother had died. His father had been encouriging her to carry on. With anger an hatred in his blood, Valorum then force pulled a republic vibrosword from the wall that was there of decoration. His father then drew his own blade, the two now men, began to brawl. After a short but tricky battle, Valorum parried his fathers blade to the side and then uppercutted his fathers throat with the vibrosword. His father then fell to the floor, trembeling with gore. Valorum then struck his father down. He had killed his own flesh.

As a matter of this, Valorum's brother Simon had completed his training as a republic forces officer and had also turned age to legally live by himself. So for 6 months, Valorum was under the care of his older brother, until Simon had found the blood stained weapon was held by His own brother! Then he had taken four other republic forces officers to murder Valorum, but now Valorum had been taking training lessons in meele combat, he would have been even tougher than before. They took action in this and bought rifles with them to finish Valorums life. But this tactic didn't work. Valorum had slaughtered all five officers including his Brother. He was now with his sister, taken to a fosterhouse on Nar Shadda.

Valorum now on the planet of scavengers and smugglers, was then taken into care by Kaios Kestel, his wife and three sons, Jankol the Eldest, who was a scavenging little boy. Kae, who was hoping to become a trooper for the republic. and Riagnos, the youngest and Valorums Faviroute of the family. Riagnos was only 6 when he met Valorum, but The boy was very wise and new much about the sith. He listened to Riagnos's teachings of the sith and was intruiged by them. when Valorum was 19 and had been staying with the family for 5 years now.. The day night before Valorum was going to start his own life in the world, the sith burn't the houses all over Nar shadda down. The only 2 who escaped unharmed was Valorum and Kaios, the two eldest made it out with minor head and jaw injurys but Kaios's wife had not made it out alive. And Riagnos was missing. Valorum disapeered of in the smoke and found a sith Overseer. He had then made the biggest mistake of all, he had just signed up for the sith.

He then became pure sith and then read the History of sith lord Darth Nihilus, he was so intruiged by this he created his own clan, this was called the Archives of Nihilus. After Valorum had spent many years in the sith, and had became Darth Valorum, he thougt it was time to leave the sith after 21 years of slaughter. Valorum the dedicated his life to the mysteries of the sith Lord Darth Nihilus. He began and finished his complexed studies on Dromund Kaas. He then met his greatest Foe yet, Fesoj Kestel. After reuniting with the sith an then Killing many jedi while trying to kill Fesoj. He also killed Kaios in the raid of the jedi order. Kaios was acctually a jedi who opened a small jedi academy on the oceon planet of Manaan. Kaios told him just before he died that Riagnos was still alive and was now sith. Valorum slaughtered many jedi and then never stopped this vile addiction.

Then he reicived a holocall from Fesoj Kestel himself. He told him that they would end there final duel on Martelet XII. Valorum agreed to this, but while on his approach to the abandoned space station he found one of the most heart warming things he had seen in this life. It was the Ravenger! (Darth Nihilus's ship) He then found Nihilus's lightsaber on the jukyard of a ship and took the weapon with him and kept it safe. He then forged a replica of Nihilus's mask in just one week and carried on toward Martelet XII.

When he found Fesoj on Martelet XII The two imediatlly lunged into battle, they both counter attacked eachother constantly until Valorum was force into a heavy pile of Desh rock. There was a meere silence until Valorum lunged out of the rock with his lightsaber split in half. They fought bravley and one half of Valorums lightsaber was cut into half and broke. Now Valorum only had one saber but still fought with utter bravery. The battle took many minutes until Valorum plummeted the end of his lightsaber into Fesoj's face and kicked him back. This then resulted into seeing Fesoj's SaberKnife. Then the two titans clashed again. after Valorum then used the same technique as he did on his farther, but the instead of stabbing him straight on, he gripped Fesoj's SabeKnife from his belt and Twirled and pressed the ingited SaberKnife into his windpipe. Valorum left the jedi knight to die and the never went back to the sith.

Valorum now meditates at the Peak of the scuplture in the dark temple on Dromund Kaas. He refuses to come down and kills anyone who interupts him. You might be thinking well, what happened to his sister? Well she did become a jedi in the end, she weilded two lightsabers, and Orange Lightsaber and a Blue ligthsaber. She went to the dark temple and faced Valorum herself, she interupted Valorum, and she was quickly delt with after one of the scupltures was force onto her and broke her jaw, having so much impact on the blood circulation, she died of blood loss. Now nobdy dares to interupt Valorum, he now wears the mask of Nihilus, and No-one else does.
Valorum, Ratataki, Deception, Sith Assassin. [Red Eclipse]
Guild: Archives of Nihilus

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04.30.2012 , 09:31 AM | #110
Quote: Originally Posted by Trunkan View Post
Hey all, do you guys still give feedback? Would be great if someone could advice me on this character, there's a lot of developing to do - English is not my native tongue and this is my second character so I have got a lot to learn.

Would be most appreciated!


Species/Race: Twi'lek
Name: Zaamat
Last Name: Aatov
Nickname: "Swipe"
Gender: Male
Place of Birth: Sleheyron
Age: 74
Height: 160 centimetres/5' 2''
Weight: 170 kilos/375 lbs
Hair Color/Style: Long lekkus decorated with black tribal tattoos, resembling leaves, berries and other wild plants
Facial Appearance: His double chins and his general obesity, in combination with his energic eyes and happy smile, would make even the darkest of Sith lords smile upon peeking at his face - old, wrinkled
Eye Color: Blue
Body Appearance: Blue skinned, overweight, big and long lekkus. His back is slightly bent due to his age and hours upon hours spent in the Jedi temple's refectories and gardens
Home Planet: Ryloth
Current Residence: With the return of the Empire and the horrible battle which took place at the Republic's capital world, he got forced into retirement and currently lives off selling his home-grown lipana berries to the higher echelons of the society (Usually influential senators and rich CEOs)
Allegiance: He is a staunch supporter of the Republic and its senators, generals and Jedi
Profession: Jedi dietist and artisan. Before the Sacking of Coruscant, his job as a dietist took him and his Sullustan companion Teep "Swoop" Nytt on travels all around the galaxy in search for exotic, rare products, which they cooked into highly nutricious food and drinks for the Jedi training at the temple or out in the field. This work sharpened their diplomatic minds, having to negotiate and sign contracts with isolated groups on distant planets in order to get to harvest and produce their territorial products. Hence, with decades of experience, Zaamat's diplomatic skills are almost in line with the top-notch diplomats of the order. His botanical skills are second only to the Ithorian masters, and even they are impressed by his innovative mind and creative solutions.
Armor/Clothes: Wears brown Jedi robes, keen on always wearing a skirt and a white apron embrodied with images of wroshyr trees while working [in the kitchen or the garden]
Primary Weapon(s): Lightsabre, green colour - although not much of a fighter, Zaamat is knows his deal in the Soresu lightsabre form
Miscellaneous Item(s): A holocron made by Teek Nytt - with detailed recipes and formulas of Jedi diet


Zaamat Aatov - a heavy tattooed light blue Twi'lek Jedi dietist and artisan who once chose to liberate an enslaved human boy during a culinary study tour all around the planet of Nar Shaddaa and take him under his wing as his Jedi padawan. The boy had been brought as an infant to Wobla the Hutt by Devaronian slavers from an unknown planet four years ago. He was quickly taught the rules - to live with a slave collar around his neck twenty-four hours a day. Obey or suffer.

As a drudge, the boy was constantly pressured by heavy labour to manage the hologardens onboard Wobla's luxury yacht, which at the time was the single, most expensive and exclusive cruiser to be found in the whole system. (Until Wobla's later-to-be rival Yunta the Hutt, had everyone onboard the legendary yacht massacred in a bloody plot to kill Wobla's reputation as being the best party host in The Hutt Cartel - unofficially funded by the Exchange)

With three decks of pure luxurity - five separate cantinas, an invaluable slave quarter with dozen of professional Twi'lek slaves offering everything from massage and escort to target practice for each and every one of Wobla's valued guests and of course the grandeur hologarden on the bottom floor, featuring nothing less than exotic gree technology - the yacht was truely a marvel to behold, a priced possession of the grand businesshutt.

Zaamat was as previously mentioned, on a culiary cruise through the system when he first encountered his future apprentice, Bal Shosa. Invited by the Hutt himself to be amongst the first guests to test new formula for Raxan-worm fluid wine, Zaamat's attention was instantly drawn to the hologarden on the lower levels of the yacht as the Hutt's wingmen guided them around the ship. He asked the other in his crew to continue the tour as he stood still, admiring the technological masterpiece. Astonished by the landscape of the hologarden, with its authentic aromas, soothing breeze and beautiful scenery; the first thoughts which ran through his mind were "How do they tend it, all this exo-tech. Are there Gree present here?", Then he noticed the white haired child tinkering with the ventilation shafts near one of the holoprojectors. "No, of course not" he added as he steered his steps towards the boy.

As he approached the him, Zaamat noticed the slave collar around his neck and empathy slowly reached his mind. The boy turned around and gave the Twi'lek's a curious look, Then quickly looked down in the floor. Perhaps intimidated by his big stature, perhaps not.

He was in any case quick with introducing himself "Bal Shosa at your service, sir" his voice sounded and bowed politely, with his look to the floor. As with most slaves, Zaamat put on a happy face, smiled and reached out his hand in a gesture for him to look up and meet his eyes. Perhaps uncertain, the boy slowly, with care looked up to the big, blue Twi'lek which stood before him.

They got observe each other for a few seconds before the shock collar kicked in an electric shock and shook the boy to the ground.

The rules are clear: Obey your master, do not question your master and DO NOT speak without being spoken to first.

Horrified by the scene and his mind clouded by emotion, Zaamat drew his lightsabre and with the precision of a Jedi cut loose the slave collar, which fell off the boy's neck with a thud, making malfunctioning sounds. "Bzz bzzzzz beep!" then died off.

The boy, who had not yet realized what just happened, stared at Zaamat - with his lighsabre drawn and strained look on his face as the Weequay security guards came running through the holoforest as the slave-revolt alarm sounded. They doubted a moment when saw the Jedi's posture and his weapon before drawing their rifles, aiming them at both the Jedi and the boy.

"Pardon us, master Jedi. You got with the slaves?" one of the Weequay guards said "Come with us" and motioned with his rifle at an entrance near the authentic holowaterfall to the right of them. Zaamat inclined his head, reached down to pick up the unconscious boy and carried him with, off to the guards' security office.

"I want to negotiate" Zaamat told the Weequay guards as they sat down in the yacht's security office. "If my assumptions are correct, master Wobla is very interested in what I have to offer him" he continued and reached for his pockets. "This" he said and revealed a small brown pouch "Is yagaran aleudrupe plant seed. The last time I checked, the Exchange annihilated an entire colony of Duros botanics on Telos just to get one corn of seed from this plant. I have two dozen - and I am sure... that our dear Hutt would certainly be interested in such prestige and stomping their status underfoot by having twenty-four times the resources they have. In return of this boy's freedom". The Weequays looked queried, chatted some inbetween on their native tongue, then spoke "Yes. This is prized by Wobla the Hutt, he spoke much of it... we can deal."

What Zaamat didn't tell them was that the seeds were fake, not some rare seed from another part of the galaxy, no. Just normal grass seeds he intended to grow to feed the Jedi temple's domesticated beasts with.

Zaamat gave the pouch of yagaran aleudrupe plant seed to the Weequays. He lifed the boy up and walked out off the room, off the yacht and to the spaceport where he met his friend Teek, who offered him ride in his cargo ship, used for storing plants and raw materials.

And so they left the planet, the rest is history.


*03:28 Trunkan has finished writing this character biograhpy*

Thanks for reading and hope you like it, as well as have feedback for it.
I wish you could now be a jed dietist on the game, I must agree 5'2 is quite short and is the average height for a 13 year old. but I love the reasons of food for this guy, great bio, but on more thing is that he got on to his ship thingy or whatever for whine tasting. I thought that jedi where not aloud to drink alchohal. might be wrong but it is a bad influence on Zaamats students.
Valorum, Ratataki, Deception, Sith Assassin. [Red Eclipse]
Guild: Archives of Nihilus