The Short Fic Weekly Challenge Thread!
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10.20.2013 , 01:32 PM |
Every time you clap, a story get it's comments!
... well not
time. What, you think I can hear you people clapping all the time? Please, I only get video feed from the hidden cameras in your room, not... au... di
ON TO THE COMMENTS!!
@TheStirge: Haha! Love the idea of a fun-loving, child like jedi! And I get the vision of T7 tossing up his oil afterwards... much like I used to do after riding one of those d*mn things.
“Damned good looking!” Fuse noted.
Nikeo raised a brow. “Really? Hadn’t noticed, sir.” He grinned at Fuse who grinned back. The Zabrak who already ranked as Lieutenant couldn’t be much older than he was. Right now he appeared to be even younger.
“Are you two done behaving like pubescent adolescents?” Jorgan growled. “We might actually have a connection here.
is why Aric Jorgen gets sent into battle with just his underwear! I am really loving your Zal/Nikeo stuff! It's hard to pick out anything specific because it's all
good. Nikeo's dislike of Command but desire to be a great Trooper. His contrast with his brother. His interaction with Zal. All great stuff.
@Marissalf: Kinka is very quickly growing on me. "Prof. Evil", HA! And I love the talk she has with Mel. A lot of time our folks see more of the truth than we let ourselves see. And her catching Gault off guard was priceless. The Vector piece was great too. I can see Vector wondering that, his human side's insecurity coming to the surface.
“Three days,” Mari repeated, a seductive smile curving her full lips, “You’re not a stupid man, are you Aric?”
“No,” he grinned, setting the half empty glass down, “No I’m not.”
And yet, fate would try to prove otherwise. HAHA! Man, Jorgen's life is gonna be pretty damn interesting from here on out. Nicely done.
Anyway, so many fun stories here! I've decided to join in
Also, this story might have gotten away from me *just* a tad. It's a long one, 2300 words.
My name is DSM, and I approve of this message. Welcome aboard!, drinks are to the right, chips are on the table, and leave your pants at the door. Glad you could join us!
Nice first offering! I especially liked this:
She presses the glass to her lips, but doesn’t even let herself taste the rancid drink. Juma juice is Zen’s usual order. Cipher Nine thinks it’s vile. Those kinds of disconnects make the disguise easier. Nine is wearing her Lena-skin, and Lena drinks juma juice. Or at least she pretends to. Nine doesn’t drink on jobs unless she absolutely has to.
As a matter of fact, I loved this entire piece for the well written peek into the Agent's psyche. It was gritty, introspective, and it felt real. Definitely a character to keep a look out for!
@Lesaberisa: Ayrs: Great use of Elara's lines. Especially the "Let me help you!". There are times I'm screaming at my screen "NO!" because she's
on my back about helping me! Loved the battle with the tie, too. "
a desperate life and death battle with the most evil piece of clothing that anyone had ever thought to invent
" HA! Great line!
@Malicineve: Wow, NICE! A peek into her past and the the follow up with Quinn! The foreshadowing was awesome!
@Amurri: "For Clan Ordo." That was a sweet use of in game story there! And the description of what Mandolorians have become vs. what they were was awesome! I loved it.
@Bright: HAHAH! Nice plug there Jr.!
And we’ll be there to confront her?”
“Oh, absolutely not
That made me laugh out loud. I could almost hear his reply with a hint of "
no, that'd be insane
" tone behind it. I love his second piece of advice. So very true, once again affirming my love for the Wynston
Now you see that Evil will always triumph, because good is