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06.06.2013 , 02:30 PM |
Notes to Chapter VI
Yep, Jaesa's a traitor. And she actually goes much further down the rabbit hole than Jacen Solo did in his own
. What treason means will be a touchstone later on - one of the secondary characters, who hasn't been introduced yet, will help Jaesa work through that knot later on.
, well, I could hardly go a whole story without referencing Chris Cornell, who has a wonderful voice, or
, which is an wonderful movie. Also, it's Jaesa's first murder, so there's that.
it, did he
?...well, you needn't worry. The second is-"
That little exchange at the start is, of course, the beginning of the Nar Shaddaa Bonus Series, with Zavrasha and Colonel Harok. I inserted that little insulting ekphrasis of Harok there just to show how gross it seemed to me that you could flirt with him. And the other part is one of Vette's companion quests, "Memory Torn". I relaxed my little rule about two-person parties for that just because I wanted more Vette in this story. More Vette can never be a bad thing.
Baras' and Gonn's constant references to "the fringe systems" as though that were a term that meant anything always pissed me off. So I turned it into a conversation about some sparsely populated sectors of the Mid Rim between Hutt Space on the one hand and the Kashyyyk/Lantillies trade zone on the other. Because I'm silly like that, and because those places are next to Quesh anyway. I also always thought Baras' insistence that Fawste and his buddies be killed was a little strange, so I tried to come up with some kind of a reason for that, too. Unfortunately, there's not really any scope for Aly finding out about the reason before she gets to Quesh or Hoth, so. My little formula is that Baras believed that Fawste had information on Admiral Monk (instead of Xerender), a plausible thing to believe since he was meeting with Gonn (whose interests lay in the "fringe systems", not Hoth), and that Aly finding out about
little plan would derail Baras' attempt to embarrass Vengean over Quesh.
Also also, I thought that the notion that Gonn was the sole person to stand in the way of a dictated peace - when military exhaustion, Republic counteroffensives, and such were all much more relevant - was stupid.
Having said all that, although the confrontation with Gonn didn't make a whole lot of sense, especially in terms of dialogue, I wasn't sure what I could do to change it for the better. So the dialogue is almost completely word-for-word, something that will be happening progressively less and less as the story wears on.
I swear the fight scenes pick up again. This one was a little on the tame side because I wanted to focus on the
implications of the fight. And also highlight the lols of how semi-useless companions can be sometimes. There are some real slam-bangers in there eventually. I promise. Also, Chekhov's Guns, because I AM A WRITER.
Given that the title owes something to the novel
, I decided to add in some conscious references in the text as well. "Choose, and act" is one of Vergere's injunctions to Jacen, and Jaesa echoes that when she finally decides to kill the man she's fighting in the safe house. Later on, Aly's semi-coherent philosophical rambling is like a more drawn out and less effective version of Vergere's talk with Jacen on the nature of the dark side. It's got a decidedly different point to it: Vergere was a Jedi who thought like a Sith, and Aly is a Sith who thinks like a Jedi. But they both subscribe to varying degrees of a subjective morality.
Aly and Jaesa will have
all the talks
I think bright_ephemera was the one who
first got me to think about Jaesa's eyes that way
, and now I can't stop.
(n., Greek) - "mirth, merriment"
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