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Ventessel
03.26.2013 , 09:30 PM | #53
Quote: Originally Posted by Aurbere View Post
That's a good point. Darn you hind sight!



The "No" is kind of characteristic of Star Wars (it's in almost every movie lol ), so I felt that it fit.

Edit: I already have the next installment partially written and, looking back at this one, it is much better imo.
True enough, Star Wars does favor some "classic" cliches. And I have found that after I post each chapter of my own work, I'll look back over it and find myself changing bits of dialogue and certain pieces here and there to better fit the story as a whole.
The Heir to ChaosAdded Chapter Sixteen-- 17 APR 2013
“People sleep peaceably in their beds at night only because rough men stand ready to do violence on their behalf.” ~ George Orwell