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Ashlian
06.16.2012 , 08:10 AM | #4
I loved her conflict with what she's feeling, the smuggler dialogue comes across as so flippant and assured, and you give us a completely different internal dialogue. I would love to see more of both your smuggler and your SW They're very interesting people and you're using the dynamic of first person well. Two thumbs up!