Sorry man, I didn't like it so much.
First of all, the post-cut trailer at the start was kind of dragged out, and unlike popular and interesting web game series on youtube, you didn't catch my attention or humor. Which is why I concluded, that I didn't like it.
I'd suggest putting more energy to it and preparing something to say. You seem very uncomfortable and that makes it hard for the viewer to trust your expression and message.
I hope you get where I am going with this. Best of luck in the future!
/Spydax & Mute